Some people believe that working from home is beneficial for employees and companies, while others think it has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people think that working from
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is beneficial for companies
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employees,
while
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others argue there are more disadvantages to it.
This
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essay wants to discuss both views and why I believe it heavily depends on a
workers
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motivation
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for the
company
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. Since Corona hit the world in 2020, working
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from
home
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became
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more popular than ever.
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, many sick days could be prevented and employees didn´t
had
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to take time off to care for their children as they could
work
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and look after their offspring
simultaneusly
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simultaneously
.
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, no one has to drive to
work
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when working from
home
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, which improves
overall
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motivation
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and the ability to take more time to rest. It is widely known that enough recovery helps to
work
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more efficiently, which in
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helps companies to utilize their workforce more effectively and improve production.
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,
this
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is only possible if the
company
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can motivate their workers to actually do something in
homeoffice
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the office
.
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means, there is no effective way to control someone on how much they are working, or doing other things. Admittedly, doing house chores
doing
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working hours is easily done when working at
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anyways
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. And since no one can check productivity at all times, if a person lacks the
motivation
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to
work
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for their employer, they have little reason to not abuse
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fact. In summary, working from
home
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can be
benficial
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beneficial
for both employees and
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company
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the company
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as long as there is
motivation
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given and the thought of pulling on the same string. If
this
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isn´t given, there is a big risk of
loosing
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productivity. I firmly believe that
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the homeoffice
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homeoffice
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home office
is only
usefull
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useful
if the person wants to
work
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, and wants their
company
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to succeed.

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Make sure to correct spelling mistakes, like 'frome' and 'simultaneusly.'
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Try to give clearer examples and details to support your points, especially about motivation.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas, like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'finally.'
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You clearly stated your opinion in the introduction and summary.
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You touched on both views of working from home well.

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