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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

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Dear Asher, Hope
this
 finds you well. It's been a
while
that
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 we've been in touch so I thought about writing to you. The
last
 time we spoke, you discussed about issues you're facing settling in your new school. Well,
this
 is natural my friend, to get comfortable and used to
of
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a new place or a setup right away is difficult.
However
, adaptation is the key. I would suggest you
to
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start socializing. I remember you were very active in
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 Club, try joining the Drama Club of your school. Volunteer in social services,
this
 will not only keep you busy but
also
 you'll be able to get to know other allies of your school.
Also
, if
you'll
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 start taking part in the general classroom discussions,
this
 will give a chance to the teachers and your class fellows to get to know you more. I am very sure you're going to make a great friend circle of your own pretty soon.
Along with
 all
this
, keep writing to your people here, to feel less isolated. Let us know how you're coping
up
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with things there. Looking forward to
hear
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 from you soon. Love and wishes, Mahroo
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coherence cohesion
Try to start each new idea or suggestion in a new paragraph to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using redundant words like 'comfortable and used to of' – 'comfortable with' will suffice. This makes your writing clearer and more concise.
task achievement
Be mindful of minor grammatical issues like 'coping up' – it should be 'coping with.' Small corrections can improve the overall impression.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is very appropriate and friendly, which is exactly suited for the task.
task achievement
You have covered all the bullet points effectively, offering specific and helpful advice to your friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduce yourself
  • genuine interest
  • rapport
  • like-minded individuals
  • school community
  • volunteer
  • open-minded
  • comfort zone
  • casual setting
  • hobbies and activities
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