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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the provided figure illustrates the variation in
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 of pupils houres in five
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different
 universities.
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observe
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that
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learner
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group
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c
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weekdays
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spent
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hours
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while
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group
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 the lowest average
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hours
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overall
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study
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hours
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rise
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hours
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college d
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colleges
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the
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 was 5.6.
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learner
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learners
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 of
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study
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weekdays
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weekends
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. according
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shown
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 in the
chart
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 the enrollee in
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group
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they
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spent
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studying more
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c
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.though the
learner
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 spent more
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than
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 student
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in group
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a
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weekdays
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in
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addition
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trainner
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trainees
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 more time
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more
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weekends
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from 10 to 6.2. in the
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group
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 was the top performing
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in contrast
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both of the
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chart
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 elucidate the
weekdays
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chart
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 it was
learner
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c
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expened
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expanded
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learner
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was
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 they consumed during the weekend 9
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.
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 the decreased pupils was
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words learner, group, c, weekdays, study, hours, weekends, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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