A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this fact

Most of the countries in the world use
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as a main
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of cash. Sadly
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could
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of issues.  In general, it's a good thing for the
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's income to have many visitors. They could make money from it and have the
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's culture shared with other people from all over the world.
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, the problem is if the
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does not have any other
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of income except
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. Because the situation is not always stable. At any minute a war could start, a new disease could be spread, and the flight companies may have issues with the planes and stuff.
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the
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should not focus on
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only things and rely fully on them. They should work on other stuff
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as factors, oil, gas, and other industries things. In conclusion,
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is a very strong
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of income if it is managed properly,
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to other industrial things

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Make sure to state your main idea clearly in the introduction and support it well in your body paragraphs.
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Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to connect your ideas and make your writing easier to follow.
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Expand on your points with specific examples to strengthen your argument and provide more detail.
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You presented a clear main idea about the relationship between tourism and income.
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Your essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic impact
  • local businesses
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • heritage preservation
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural dilution
  • cost of living
  • job instability
  • sustainable tourism
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