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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
To begin
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, the electricity is made by hydroelectric power station and the process
started
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 from the river. The river's
water
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 goes to a huge
reservoir
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 which has a massive dam. At the dam back there is
water
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 intake which at the day time is open and at night time closed. Following, electricity generated by the
water
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 flow during the day,
however
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, the
water
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pumpped
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pumped
 back to the high-level
reservoir
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 through the dam at night. For the previous
process
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process,
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 reversible turbines are used for
water
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 flow.
While
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 the sun is up, a low-level
reservoir
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 is reached by
river’s
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the river’s
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water
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. In the night hours, the
water
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 returned
into
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to
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 a high-level
reservoir
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.
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 in the process, the national grid was achieved by power lines because of the generator. The reversible turbine and the generator created the power station which helped the
water
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 flow forward and backward

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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