Some people feel that public money should not be spent on cultural amenities such as museums, theatres and art festivals. How important do you think these things are to society as a whole? Are there any areas which are more important for the government to fund?

Some people do not see or believe in investing in the cultural
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shame, or they do not love
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their
cultural
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culture
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,
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the lack of
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knowledge
. spending
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apply
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public money
in
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something
benefits
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that benefits
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our
country
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it is
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fantastic
, even if it is
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something we do not believe,
or
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love.
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especially
in the local
culture
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like
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the
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clothes or food.
however
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, funds
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area
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will bring benefits to the
country
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like
increase
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the
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a mount
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of tourists which increase the economy.
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contrast
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another
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do not have
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culture
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a recent study shows low economy.
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, it is developing
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society in
great
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matter.
compare
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to the
culture
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, there is a diverse
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we should focus
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such
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health care,
needs
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great doctors and nurses.
also
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new methods of medicine.
also
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college the
govermenet
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government
need
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to fund it, to
develop
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their nations. and the
militry
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military
force to
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a strong
country
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like
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, in any greatest
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the key
of
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success is
develop
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the
country
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in any
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area
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like sport, health,
eduction
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education
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, entertainment,
culture
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, and most
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the
militry
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military
force.

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task achievement
Make sure to introduce your main points clearly. Try to include a strong introduction that outlines your view on the importance of cultural spending.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphs to separate your ideas. Each paragraph should have one main point and supporting details. Try to connect your ideas logically.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples for your points to make them clear and memorable. Explain how cultural spending directly helps areas like tourism and the economy.
task achievement
You have shown some understanding of the importance of public spending on culture and other areas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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