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The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the average hose prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the average cost of
houses
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 in three different countries between 1997 and 2014.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the highest price of housing was from country A,
while
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 county C shows the lowest number. Beginning with county A in 1997 the prices of
houses
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 were about 200
thousand
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dollars
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. In 2004
this
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 peak was not maintained and the cost of buying
houses
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 was over 500
thousand
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dollars
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, and
this
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 figure was followed by a minor fall in 2007 at just under 500
thousand
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dollars
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 and a subsequent rise in 2014 at 750
thousand
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dollars
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. In 1997 County B
houses
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 were about 150
thousand
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dollars
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, and
this
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 trend grew to 250
thousand
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dollars
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 in 2001. In 2004
this
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 figure shows a small rise of around 320
thousand
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dollars
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,
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however
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however,
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 in
2008
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2008,
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 the trend rebounded to 250
thousand
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dollars
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. In 2009 the cost increased to 500
thousand
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dollars
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 and
this
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 figure shows 5 years of stability in
this
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 number. In country C in 1997 the level was at about 100
thousand
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dollars
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 and it hasn’t changed much for 7 years.
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 in 2007,
this
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 statistic shows 250
thousand
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dollars
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, and
this
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 growth was not sustained in 2008 prices were at 100
thousand
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dollars
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 in 2009
this
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 line
growth
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grew
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to 250
thousand
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dollars
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 and did not change until the end of the year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, thousand, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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