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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The image illustrates the total of visitors
in
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 a certain Caribbean
island
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 in the years from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total of visitors gradually increased from 2010 to 2017.
However
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, the
number
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 of tourists staying on
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island
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the island
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 and those who
on
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are on
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 cruise ships
were fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 in the period of time before reaching their
peaks
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peak
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 in 2017. In 2010, the
amount
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number
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 of tourists who visited and stayed on
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island
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the island
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 was around 0.75
millions
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million
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. It continuously
adding
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added
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 up until 2015 and it was the highest
number
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that
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of
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 1.5
million
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of
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apply
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people
decided
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who decided
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 to
have
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a
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apply
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stay on the
island
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.
However
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, before reaching its peak again in 2017, the
number
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 of tourists decreased to slightly under 1.5
million
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. Cruise ships had around 0.25
million
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 visitors in the year 2010. It increased to 0.5
million
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 in 2011,
then
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 had
a
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the
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 lowest
number
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as
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in
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 the first year in 2012. In
next
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the next
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 few years, people spraying on
cruise
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cruises
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 consistently
grown
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grew
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 up. The most
frequency
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frequent
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 of people
stay
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staying
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 was in 2017
that
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when
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 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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 came.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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