The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic depicts the steps of producing
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane. Generally, in order to make
sugar
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, there are seven steps which begin
from
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growing the plants until drying and cooling the product. In the initial stage, the
sugar
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canes are planted for approximately one year until a year and a half to be harvested. After they were ready to be processed, the cropping could be done either directly by the farmers or
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by tractors.
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, the harvested
sugar
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canes are crushed to obtain the extract from it with a juicer machine. To obtain the syrup from the juice, the extract of
sugar
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canes should be purified and filtered to get rid
the
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dirt which
are
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limestones.
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An evaporator
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,
moreover
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, is used to get the syrup by heating the juice and
then
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it
passed
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through
the
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a
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further
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process in the centrifuge machinery. In
this
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stage,
sugar
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is separated from the syrup so that the pure final product can be cooled and dried
afterward
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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