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Band 2

The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The plans depict the layout of a university
sports
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centre
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 present, and how it will look after
rebuild
Correct article usage
the rebuild
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, the building will
expanding
Verb problem
be expanding
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extra
Correct article usage
an extra
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sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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room
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in
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on
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 two sides. Remarkably,
they
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 are several
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room
Fix the agreement mistake
rooms
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will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
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destructed
Wrong verb form
be destroyed
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in
Change preposition
on
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 the
left
Correct word choice
left-hand
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hand
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side
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. The
sports
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centre
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's layout had significantly
alter
Wrong verb form
altered
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 in the future plans. Currently, the
sports
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centre
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's entrance is
in
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on
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southern
Correct article usage
the southern
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 side. There
have
Verb problem
is have
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 reception
face
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area
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 on
southern
Correct article usage
the southern
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 entrance,
Linking Words
then
Correct word choice
and then
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 changing
room
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seating
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with seating
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 was sitting in both sides. And
gym
Correct article usage
the gym
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 was built in northern. Exclude
inside
Correct article usage
the inside
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room
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, two
outdoors
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outdoor
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 courts separated on
eastern
Correct article usage
the eastern
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 and western
.
Check wording
sides.
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 In the future plants,
Linking Words
firstly
Punctuation problem
firstly,
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 it demolished both outdoor courts.
However
Linking Words
, the middle of
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sports
Correct article usage
the sports
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centre
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 still remained. The gym will be expanded, and the leisure pool will replace the outdoor court on the left. The new changing
room
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 will be added in the left corner, with a
sports
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 shop adjacent to it. On the right side, the
sports
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 hall and two dance studios
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instead
Verb problem
are instead
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.
Changing
Correct article usage
The changing
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room
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 and a café will remain in the southeast corner.

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planning
Plan your write. Start with a short part that says what the plan is now and what will change. Then give the detail in a clear order.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and idea, like and, but, then, next.
grammar
Keep one idea in one line. Use short simple sentences.
grammar
Check small grammar parts, like verb form and tense, to be right.
lexis
Be clear with space words, like left side, right side, indoors, outdoors.
task
Give clear detail about each part, where it is and what changes come.
content
The plan tries to mention both the present and the future.
structure
The writer uses left and right to show place.
content
Some details are given about the rooms and areas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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