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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two plans illustrate the current layout of a university
sports
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centre
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 and the proposed changes to the facility.
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, the
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centre
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 will undergo significant expansion and modernisation, with the removal of outdoor courts and the addition of several new indoor facilities, making the
centre
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 far more comprehensive. At present, the
centre
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 consists of a 25-metre pool in the middle, with a reception area at the south entrance, a changing room to the west, and seating to the east. A gym is located to the north of the pool. Outdoor courts are situated on both the western and eastern sides of the building. In the future plan, the outdoor courts will be replaced by new facilities. On the west side, a leisure pool, a new changing room, and a
sports
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 shop will be built. On the east side, a
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 hall will be constructed next to the existing seating area, and two dance studios will be added to the far east. The gym will be expanded northwards, and new facilities
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 a café and an additional changing
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room,
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 will be built at the south-east corner of the
centre
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.

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Add one or two more key details from the plan, like where the old changing room is kept or changed, to make the report more full.
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Use one more line to compare the centre now and after the work, not only list changes.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas move in a clear order, but you can use a few more linking words like 'while' or 'also' to show ties between parts.
coherence and cohesion
The overview is good, but the last part could group changes by side or by type in a more even way.
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You cover the main changes and give a clear overview of the big plan.
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The report stays on the plan and does not add off-topic ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, middle, and end, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Each part has a clear focus: now first, then the future plan.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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