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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

he
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 two maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 how the university
sport
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sports
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 centre will have been changed after refurbishment.
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,the sports
center
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 is planned to be expanded,with current outdoor courts being transformed
and
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 various facilities
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 as dance studios,a leisure pool and a cafe will be added to enhance the functionality of the complex. Nowadays,there’s a 25-m width of the poor in the
center
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,which is surrounded by a changing
room
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 in the east,a gym in the north,a seating
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 the east and a reception in the south.The outdoor courts are situated on the west and east sides
respectively
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. In the future,the pool will still
have been
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 located in the
center
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.And most
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room
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 which are adjacent to the pool won’t have been changed.The only one which will have been expanded is the gym.In the northwest corner,the leisure poor will have been
builted
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built
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it,there will be
a
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 extra changing
room
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 which is adjacent to a new sports shop.In the northeast,two dance studios will be constructed
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Besides
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 that,a secondary extra changing
room
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 will have been added to the south of them.An entertainment structure that serves as a cafe will have been set up in the west of the changing
room
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,which is placed in symmetry
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 the sports sh

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Write a clearer overview. Say the main changes in one short part.
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Cover all key places on both maps. Some new parts are missing or not clear because the last line is cut.
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Use more exact details from the maps, like where each new room is.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a more clear order, for example: overview, now, then future.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like 'first', 'next', 'on the left', and 'on the right' to guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Check each sentence so it is full and easy to follow. A few parts are hard to understand now.
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You gave an overview and showed the main idea of change and growth.
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You included many key places such as the pool, gym, courts, dance studios, and cafe.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph plan with now and future parts.
coherence and cohesion
You used place words like 'north', 'south', 'east', and 'west' to help the reader.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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