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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The two diagrams illustrate the layout of a university
sports
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 centre at present and future plans. At present,the
sports
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 centre features a 25m pool in
central
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the central
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 area,with a gym above it,a changing
room
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 to the left,seating to the right,and a reception in front of
entrance
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the entrance
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.Two outdoor courts were located on the western and eastern
side
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sides
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 of the central main building. In the future plans,the centre will see a major upgrade in terms of layout and function.The core facilities
including
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, including
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 the 25m pool,changing
room
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,seating and reception,will remain in their original positions.The outdoor courts will be replaced by new and
muti-functional
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 facilities.On the western side,a leisure pool will be constructed with a changing
room
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 and s
sports
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 shop below it.At the same time,on the eastern side,the original outdoor courts will be replaced by a
sports
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 hall with two dance studios to its right,a cafe to its south and a changing
room
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 on the right of the cafe.

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grammar
Fix small grammar and make sentences clear. Put 'the' before nouns where needed.
structure
Add a short intro and a short end to show the whole idea.
coherence
Use easy linking words like 'and', 'also', 'but', 'near' to join ideas.
lexical
Be exact with places: left, right, front, behind. Use 'in the west' or similar.
content
Good start with clear opening that states the two diagrams show the plan.
content
Main parts are named (pool, changing room, reception).
content
Shows both current and future layout.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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