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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The two diagrams illustrate the present layout of a university
sports
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centre
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 and its
future
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 plans.
Overall
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, the
sports
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centre
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 will be expanded in
future
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. The
sports
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centre
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 will build up some shops and facilities around the main building.
By contrast
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, the main building in present will not change in
future
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 except
the
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for the
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 gym area. Currently, the university
sports
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centre
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 has only some simple structures. In the main building, its core is a 25m
pool
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 and to the north of the
pool
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 is a gym.
In
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On
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 the west and north sides of the
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pool
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pool,
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it
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there
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 is
changing
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a changing
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 room and seating respectively. A reception is at the bottom of the
centre
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 facing the entrance. Outside, there are two outdoor courts in both the west and east. In
future
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, outdoor courts will be eliminated, and the leisure
pool
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 replace the west outdoor court
Besides
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, the east will
be take
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take
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place
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the place
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 of
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sports
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the sports
a sports
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 hall and dancing studio. The entrance will reconstruct a cafe and
sports
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 shop on both sides of reception, next to
two
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the two
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 shops is a changing room. The only change to the main building is the gym will be stretched.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly describe the changes and additions in your essay. Use clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas better. Use linking words to show how ideas are connected.
coherence and cohesion
Use a concluding sentence to summarize the main points. This will help wrap up your essay.
task achievement
You clearly describe the current layout of the sports centre. This is a good start!

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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