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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two
diagram
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 depict the current layout of a university
sports
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 centre and proposed transformation for
it's
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 future redevelopment.
Overall
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,the central area
if
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 the
sports
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 will
be remained
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 largely,
while
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 the most significant expansions and
aboundant
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abundance
 of facilities will be added to
in
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 two flanks,replacing the outdoor courts, whereby the centre will
be
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become more multi-functional . Nowadays,the central area
including
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25
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m pool,changing and seating room,and
reception
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reception,
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 will remain unchanged,and the gym will extend eastward,above the eastern outdoor court.
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, the outdoor court on the east will be clear,and a new
sports
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 hall and two dance studios will be built here.A cafe and a
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changing room will
also
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 be constructed in the south-east corner,adjacent to the reception. On the west side, the existing outdoor court will be converted into
leisure
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a leisure
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 pool, the
boardest
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best
 site,with a changing room and a
sports
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 shop along the south edge.In the future plans,the university
sports
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 centre will become a rectangular whole,but people can still enter through the initial entrance.

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Task response: You gave the main changes and the overview, so the answer is on the right path. But some points are not fully clear. Check facts very carefully and make each change easy to see.
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Task response: Use more exact words for place and change. For example, say what is removed, what stays, and what is added in each side of the plan.
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Task response: Avoid wrong words like 'aboundant' and unclear lines like 'the central area if the sports'. These make your ideas hard to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear 4-part shape: intro, overview, east side, west side. This helps the reader follow the report.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some link words are not used well, and some sentences are too long. Make shorter sentences. This will make the report more smooth and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Group ideas by area in a more even way. The west side has less detail than the east side, so the balance is not strong.
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Task response: You included an overview, which is very important in Task 1.
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Task response: You mentioned key new parts like the sports hall, dance studios, cafe, shop, and leisure pool.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The report is divided into paragraphs, and each paragraph has a main focus.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You used place words like east, west, south-east, and central area, which helps the reader picture the map.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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