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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Depicted in these two maps is the layout of
university
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sports
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center
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 at present and its proposed modifications for its future development. As an overview of the maps, it is evident that several significant modifications will have been made to the
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center
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,including the addition of
sports
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 venues and leisure facilities
such
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 as a leisure
pool
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 ,
sports
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 hall,dance studios and a cafe,
while
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 some existing features,
such
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 as the gym and the 25m
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pool
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pool,
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 will remain unchanged.These new alterations will enhance the functionality but
also
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adds
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 a commercial element
of
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 the
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center
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. Currently,the
sports
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center
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 features two
out door
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outdoor
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 courts located at the west and east ends.The main building in the middle is
centered
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 around a 25m
pool
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,with a gym to the north,a changing room to the west ,a reception to the south and
seating
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a seating
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 area to the east. Based on the existing plan,entering the
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center
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 from the south entrance ,
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sports
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the sports
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 shop will be found on the right-hand side and a cafe on the
right-side
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right side
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, maintaining their original main building unchanged.The current west-side courts will be replaced with a leisure
pool
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,accompanied by a changing room to its south,
while
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 the other courts will be transformed into a
sports
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 hall adjacent to the current seating area.
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,two dance studios will be constructed nearby,with the gym
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being expanded towards the east.

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grammar
Fix these small grammar and spelling errors: outdoors should be outdoor, right-side should be right side, and be careful with future forms.
structure
Make the plan clear by using two good parts: one for what is now, one for what will be. Then give the main changes in order from where you enter.
content
Keep left and right clear and the same all through. If you say 'right side' once, do not switch to 'left' elsewhere.
content
Make the overview short and clear at the start. Say what stays the same and what will change.
content
The essay tries to cover both maps and to name the new places.
structure
There is a sense of link from the plan to the run of details.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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