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Band 4

The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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 of a school and how it will be changed after transformation in the
future
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.
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, the
sports
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 will experience a significant redevelopment in the
future
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. As the space will have been extended three times
large
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as
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 before, more
humanized
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 facilities
such
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cafe
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 and
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sports
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a sports
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 shop will be added
in
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. Compared with the original one, the
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 will have become a social area with diverse functions. At present, the university
sports
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was
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 between
two
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 outdoor courts. There is a north entrance. The
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 of the activity
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 is a 25m pool,
on
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 the southern
side
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 is the reception. The gym is
at
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 the other
side
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 of the pool from reception. The changing room and seating area are
in
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 the west and east
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side
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 of the
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, respectively. In the planned
future
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,
two
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 new changing rooms will have been added, which will
have
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 located in the southeast and southwest
corner
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 of the
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. A
sports
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 shop and a café will have been built on the eastern
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and western
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side
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 of the new changing rooms, respectively. A leisure pool will
have been
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involved
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 in the
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 northwest corner. There will
have
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 added
two
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 dancing studios and a
ports
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 hall in the eastern part of the
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. The
origin
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 facilities would not have been changed in the
future
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 except the gym
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will
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 have been
two
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 times
larger
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. The small road towards the gym will
have
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 between the hall and
dancing
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the dancing
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 studios.

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task
Make a clear start, middle, end. Separate the present map and future plan in their own parts.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words (and, then, next) so the flow is easy to follow.
grammar
Check big grammar and word use. Use easy words to name parts (pool, gym, changing room, cafe).
content
Try to describe all main parts shown on the map with the same level of detail.
overview
The writer shows both now and later in the plan.
overview
The idea of adding cafe and shop is clear.
structure
There is a main topic kept in mind.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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