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The plans below show the layout of a university sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The two maps show the changes to the
road
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 access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the main developments include the addition of two roundabouts, the replacement of
bus
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 stops with a large
bus
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 station, and the relocation of the public
car
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park
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 to the east of the hospital. In 2007, the hospital was surrounded by the Ring
Road
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, and Hospital
Road
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 ran southwards from it towards the hospital entrance. Six
bus
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 stops were located along both sides of Hospital
Road
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. To the east of
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road
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, there was a combined public and staff
car
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park
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. By 2010, significant changes had been made. The
bus
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 stops were removed and replaced with a large
bus
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 station to the west of Hospital
Road
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.
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, two roundabouts were constructed—one at the junction with the Ring
Road
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 and another at the junction with City
Road
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. Meanwhile, the original
car
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park
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 became staff-only, and a new public
car
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park
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 was built to the east of the hospital.

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task response
Add a short intro that restates the task and a closing line that sums up the changes.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'also', 'next', and group changes by year so the order is clear.
structure
Good overall view of changes at the start.
coherence
Clear time order from 2007 to 2010.
content
Use of specific facts like roundabouts and bus station.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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