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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustrations display
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road
Correct article usage
the road
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 routes of a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
, the main
road
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 patterns were not changed during the given period,
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however
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however,
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 new areas
such
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 as
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bus
Correct article usage
a bus
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 station or an additional car park were built, and
bus
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 stops were removed by 2010. In 2010 all crossroads were replaced by roundabouts, that were attached to a new
bus
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 station on the west
side
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 of Hospital Rd
road
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. The
bus
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 station became an alternative
of
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to
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 six
bus
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 stops that were on
the
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apply
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both
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side
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sides
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 of the street in 2007. The position of car parking on the east
side
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 of the
road
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 stayed untouchable, but a little part of its area was taken with roundabouts,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 are quite bigger than
tradional
Correct your spelling
traditional
 crossroads,
also
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 purposed audience changed from staff and public to hospital employees only. New public parking was organized on the east
side
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 of Ring
Road
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 in 2010.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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