Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, more and more people decide to live in other countries for studying or working.
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, a foreign
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is the first obstacle they need to overcome.
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, it may bring a lot of trouble in various aspects. In my opinion, learning
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language
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is necessary for each immigrant.
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,
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is the key to communicating with other people, no matter whether foreigners are working or studying, which is a fundamental skill they need to acquire.
Secondly
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, learning a
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would enhance foreigners to fit
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the local society. Since it is not only for literacy
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but
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for cultural understanding. If immigrants would like to pursue a better life quality in living countries, it is a mandatory process for them.
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, there are several immigrants
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to learn languages, even
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though they
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have been living in other countries for many years. From my perspective, it is not
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encrouageable behavior. The main reason is that they cannot get involved in the society where they live
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. As
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, it might impact their financial circumstance, because they cannot find a job. What's more, they are incapable of getting public services,
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, health care, because they cannot talk with doctors.
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, they could be legalized by the whole society.
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, a series of social issues,
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as poverty and high criminal
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, would occur in those groups. All in all, learning a domestic
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is necessary for foreigners.
This
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is a crucial step to becoming a qualified citizen.

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grammar
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task achievement
You clearly state your opinion and the importance of learning the domestic language.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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