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What are the key arguments, both positive and negative, presented in the essay for preferring homeownership over renting?

There is an ongoing debate on popular propaganda of house ownership over leasing among people of the modern era.
According to
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 my perspective, it has more drawbacks than benefits. I will discuss both in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the bottlenecks, the most prominent one is the housing tax. The majority of nations have above 5 per cent annual tax for owning
the
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 home. All the earnings go towards taxes, mortgages and bills.
According to
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 a report most newcomers in Canada prefer to live on rent as compared to owning one. Because it was easier to own a house in past
due to
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 low government fees.
Furthermore
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, maintenance is
priority
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 for the property. As
,
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 everyone is fully stuck in daily chaos
so
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they barely get a chance to sit and relax. It's a big headache for them to manage all the stuff like cutting the grass, cleaning the driveways and throwing the garbage. To cite an example, our neighbour got
the
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 ticket for $350 from the city because the grass was over one foot and the sidewalks were dirty. What are the benefits of naming a property? Owners can design
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 their preferences. Zooming in, they can paint the walls with
favourite
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their favourite
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 colour and buy the appliances that suit
to
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them.
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, they do not need any
permissions
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permission
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for organizing
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 the parties in their place. But, tenants always need approval from landlords. To wrap up, after
concerning
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considering
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 both positive and negative concerns, renting
is outweighing
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outweighs
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 the advantages of having the house.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize your main points. This will help the reader follow your argument better.
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Try to provide more specific examples and details to support your arguments. This will make your ideas clearer and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
When discussing disadvantages or advantages, clearly separate them in your paragraphs for better organization.
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You clearly mentioned both sides of the argument, which shows that you understand the topic well.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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