The chart below shows the amount of money in billions of dollars spent on international tourism by people from seven different countries in 2011 and 2012.

The chart below shows the amount of money in billions of dollars spent on international tourism by people from seven different countries in 2011 and 2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the amount of money in billions of dollars spent on international tourism by people from seven different countries in 2011 and 2012.
The provided chart illustrates the spending of money in billions of
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on global tourism
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seven nations in 2011 and 2012
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, there were increases in Chinese and Russian visitors over the period,
meanwhile
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the figure
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remaining
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the remaining
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nations either remained unchanged or
decrease
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decreased
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slightly.
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of note is that
visitor
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visitors
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from China, Germany, and
USA
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the USA
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spent the most in two years. Regarding the top spenders, starting at 80
billions
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billion
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of
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dollars
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in 2011, the amount spent by
German
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Germany
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and
US
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the US
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remained unchanged in 2012. Meanwhile, there was a
signifiacant
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significant
jumped
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from 70
billion
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dollars
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to just over 100
billion
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dollars
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, making China
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the top spent in 2012. Turning to
remaining
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the remaining
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countries, the amount spent by
UK
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the UK
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and
Frence
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France
remained stable
almost
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50
billion
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dollars
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and 40
billion
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dollars
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,
repectively
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respectively
.
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Russia recorded
a
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increased
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sharply from just under 40
billion
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dollars
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to roughly 40
billion
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dollars
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in 2012.
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, Canadian tourists spent the least, with figures remaining below 20
billion
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dollars
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in both two years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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