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Few countries think that people at the age greater than 30 can do things like vote for country, marriage, getting driving license etc while most of the country oppose. What do you think?

Some countries believe that individuals should reach 30 years old before they are allowed to do mature things
such
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 as
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 marriage, voting for the country and getting driving license.
However
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,
i
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 believe that it is not necessary and even harmful in many cases On the one hand, it is true that people over 30 years are mature and experienced,
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, making difficult decisions
such
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 as marriage, voting for a country and getting
driving
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a driving
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 license. Can be more stable at
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 age.
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,
community
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the community
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 after 18 often
don't
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doesn't
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 think in
long
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the long
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 term and married
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 emotions and
make
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makes
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 poor life choices.
On the other hand
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, setting
such
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 high limits can reduce the freedom of humans. Most countries allow
to
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them to
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 get
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a driver
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driver
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driver's
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 license and marry from 18 to 21 years old because,
in
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at
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 that age government claims them as adults and
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 responsible for their own choices.
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, raising the life to 30 could delay independence, and limit freedom.
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 of lifting limits,
government
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the government
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 should invest in education and guidance that are going to help young adults
to
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apply
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make long-term choices In conclusion,
while
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 some folk argue that
community
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the community
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 should become independent after reaching 30 Fiscal
year
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years
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 of adulthood, I strongly disagree with that statement because age does not always determine maturity and it is a human right to become an adult after reaching 18 or 21 Fiscal year old

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overall improvement
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure for better clarity.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic.
task achievement
You have a good understanding of the issues surrounding age and maturity.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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