The pie chart below shows a frequance of US adult's online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferances.

The pie chart below shows a frequance of US adult's online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferances.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart below shows a frequance of US adult's online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferances.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of US adults who
doen
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did
their shopping online in 2015,
while
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bar
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the bar
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chart depicts
shopping
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the shopping
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preferences
calssification
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classification
of adults
among
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in
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US
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the US
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.
Oveall
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Overall
,
less
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apply
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often percentage of buying
style
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styles
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is more compared to other habits, less frequent
shoppers
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are
Unnecessary verb
apply
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prefered
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prefer
to
baught
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buy
more from stores compared to online platforms. Who selected to buy online they did shopping weekly.
To begin
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with, online
shoppers
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are shopping weekly
and
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apply
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with 15%,
while
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20 %
people
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of people
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never
goes for
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go
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online shopping.
Moreover
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, people who
prefered
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preferred
more
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apply
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online shopping
they done
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did
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their shopping
28
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at 28
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% and less often people
baught
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bought
more at 37%.
Furthermore
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, according
calssification
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classification
of those adults, less frequent
shoppers
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are
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apply
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baught
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bought
more than 80% from local stores,
while
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less frequent online
purchase
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purchases
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were done at
below20
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below 20
%. Monthly
shoppers
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selected stores over online
purchase
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purchases
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. Weekly and
all time
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all-time
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shoppers
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are goes
Wrong verb form
go
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for online buy.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shoppers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • illustrate
  • engaged
  • preferences
  • category
  • products
  • popular
  • demographics
  • convenience
  • variety
  • shopping behavior
  • technological advancements
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