Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages for individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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life, there are commonly held belief that many
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from the people that do the same
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hand the idea that individuals must have the same
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and never change their working sector
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some
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to have many
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thoughts
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and your personal life.In
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there is no easy answer
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that you must not have the same
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entire
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life and you should try to have more than one
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and
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experience
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journey
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journey
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society and all the nations

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Your introduction needs to be clearer. Try to state the topic and your opinion simply and directly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper spelling and grammar. This helps your ideas come across better.
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Try to give specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger.
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You have addressed the task by discussing both views.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • career progression
  • skillset
  • employee retention
  • workplace culture
  • job market
  • professional development
  • mobility
  • adaptability
  • specialization
  • career stability
  • economic climate
  • networking opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • employee engagement
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