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Writing Samples
Band 4

Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

Air
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pullution
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pollution
 has always been a topic of debate with some arguing that improvements in public
transport
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 by
government
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-funded projects and reducing ticket prices would significantly contribute
in
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 reducing
transport
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pollution
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.I strongly agree with the statement as
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 incentive provides long-term benefits to
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government
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the government
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such
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 as it limites the usage of private vehicles and
improves
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 infrastructure and efficiency. The main reason why I believe that that
government
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 should invest in public
transport
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 systems and reduce ticket prices
because
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is because
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 it will make the Buses/trains more affordable than private cars.
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, in cities like
Vienna
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Vienna,
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 heavy subsidized public
transport
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 led to
decrease
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 in car use. Fewer vehicles on
road
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the road
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 means reduced traffic congestion and lower
emission
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emissions
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 which ultimately leads to cleaner
air
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 and less noise
pollution
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. Another reason why I support the notion
because
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is because
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 it improves efficiency.Investment in clean and
laible
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liable
 buses, electric trains and
metro
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the metro
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system
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systems
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 will lead to better infrastructure and reduces
relaince
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reliance
 on fossil fuels.
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, electric bus fleets in cities
of
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in
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 China and Japan.
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,
better
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transport
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 system
provide
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provides
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 long-term benefits because
its
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it
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 reduces
air
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pollution
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. Reduction in
air
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pollution
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 means lower healthcare
cost
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costs
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 and environmental damage. In Conclusion,
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 financial investment in
public
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the public
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transport
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 system is costly, its long-term benefits outweigh its expenses.
Government
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 funding and cheaper fares are among the most effective
solution
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solutions
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 in combating
transport
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-related
pollution
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.
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, in order to maximize results,
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government
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the government
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 should move forward with supportive measures like launching awareness
compaigns
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campaigns
 and cycling infrastructure for cleaner and sustainable cities.

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task achievement
The introduction should clearly state your position in a more straightforward way. Consider rephrasing for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to help organize your ideas better.
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Make sure to clearly define how each example connects to your main points. This will strengthen your arguments.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, which adds credibility to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion nicely summarizes your views on the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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