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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like to the landlord to take

Dear Mr. Brown, I hope you are doing great. As we met before,
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 am Seema, your new tenant. Me and my family moved
in
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into
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 your apartment
last
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 week. Everyone in my family loved the suite as it is fully furnished with all basic requirements.
However
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, there are some problems with
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a few
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 things that
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 want to let you know.
Firsr
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First
 and Foremost,
Washing
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the Washing
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 machine is not working properly. Sometimes, it suddenly stops during the cycle and
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 not
starts
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 until we
replugs
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replug
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 it.
Apart from
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this
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, the
tubelight
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tube light
 in my room is broken,
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 usually do my assignment
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at
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the
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apply
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night time and
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 am really struggling with light. There are
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a few
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 more problems that
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 want to discuss with you in person. I would really appreciate
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it if
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 you look into
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 matter and call an electrician as soon as possible or if you want you can visit us and check the issue. Your's Faithfully Reena

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general
Make sure to check for spelling and grammar mistakes. For example, 'Firsr and Foremost' should be 'First and foremost'.
tone
It's better to use a more polite tone in a letter to your landlord. You could say 'I would appreciate your help with the following issues.'
coherence
Try to separate different ideas into their own paragraphs for better clarity. For example, one paragraph for the washing machine and another for the light.
task achievement
You introduced yourself well and mentioned the problems with the furniture clearly.
tone
The letter has a friendly tone and expresses your needs politely, which is nice.
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