Title :Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
high levels of sugar use in any food products.
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food product
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manufacturers
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task achievement
Make sure to state your opinion clearly in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Provide more examples to support your points.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion against high sugar use.
task achievement
You mention health issues, which is a good point to consider.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
One of the most pressing challenges we face as a society is pollution. While there are various sources of contamination, vehicle emissions, mainly CO2, rank at the top of the list. Some argue that government investment in mass transit systems and lower ticket prices could effectively mitigate this issue. I wholeheartedly agree; initiatives aimed at creating eco-friendly public transportation systems and promoting their use at reduced prices would likely encourage more individuals to opt for public transit instead of relying on their cars.
Without knowing about the operating information we can not use any technical application. It is very important to know the operation. Most of the daily routine work and studies are connected with technology. I strongly agree that knowing digitalization is important for all generations.
Nowadays, contemporary companies are putting their best effort into enticing customers to purchase their goods by presenting some new features daily. While there has been intense competition among different businesses over customer rates, the negative outcomes of these rivalries cannot be neglected.
I am Theo Akl. I am writing this letter to seek information regarding a business loan for my startup. I want to open my small cafe in the town. I have been working in a cafe as a senior manager for two years. I believe that, in this area, cafes attract a large portion of customers of all ages. In our town, there is only one coffee shop, which is also always closed. Hence, it is a good startup opportunity in this city.