The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The line graph illustrates the comparison between
number
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a number
the number
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of
shops
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opened and closed from
year
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2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the graph shows the sudden fall for closed
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shop
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shops
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during the
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year
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years
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2014 to 2015. It is showing
sudden
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a sudden
the sudden
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decrease in
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shop
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shops
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opened from 2011 onwards, and finished at 3000
shops
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. The number of
shop
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opening
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openings
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is more
compare
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compared
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to closures.
To begin
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with, the number of
shops
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opening
at
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in
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2011 is around 8000
shops
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,
then
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it
is
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apply
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suddenly
decrease
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decreases
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to next
year
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. After
is
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apply
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is
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it
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rising
agin
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again
to 6000
shops
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in
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year
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the year
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2014.
Then
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seen
dramatical
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a dramatical
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decrease till
year
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2018.
Furthermore
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, the
shop
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closures in
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year
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the year
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2011
was
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were
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around 6300
shops
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a
year
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,
then
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it
is remain
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remains
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same till next
year
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. After that it is little increase till next
year
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then
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it
is
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apply
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falling suddenly to below 1000
shops
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in
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year
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the year
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2015,
then
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it is rising
noticably
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noticeably
at
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to
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more
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then
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than
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5000
shops
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a
year
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. after
that is
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becoming steady till 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, year, shop with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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