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Topic 8: Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

Nowadays, people argue that
a part
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 from academic curriculum
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students
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, students
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 should learn basic
skills
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such
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 as cooking ,dressing in a
school
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other skills
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 that are not part of studies. In
this
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 essay,
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I
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 will explain the need
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education
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as well as
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skills
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 for the development of
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a
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 rounded individual. To commence with,
acedemic
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academic
 knowledge is essential for
scholar
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scholars
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 to succeed in exams and pursue higher
education
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. Subjects like math, science and
literarture
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literature
 form the basis of many future jobs.
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, in India
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, pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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has
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have
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 to opt for one stream at the senior
education
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 level so they can divert their focus on their career.
Hence
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, without strong
acedemic
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academic
skills
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 ,
learner
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learners
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 may
strrugle
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struggle
 to find good career opportunities.
On the other hand
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, basic
skills
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plays
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 a predominant role in the
overall
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 development of
personality
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the personality
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 of the individual. Learning life
skills
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 can enhance
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students
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students'
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 confidence and help them to
mange
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manage
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 stress.
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, knowing how to cook can lead to
healtheir
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healthier
 eating habits, which can positively impact
acedic
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academic
 performance. So, life
skills
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 should be
the
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 part of
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education
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the education
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 system to improve personality
and
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, and
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students
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 should
more
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be more
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 aware
about
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of
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real
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real-world
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- world
scenario
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scenarios
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.
To sum up
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 ,
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a balance
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balance
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 approach with
acedemic knolwedge
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academic knowledge
 and life
skills
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 should be introduced by educational institutes so
thay
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that
students
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 are aware of how
respect
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to respect
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 and behave in
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apply
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society
while
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 getting
good
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a good
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 educational infrastructure.

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Grammar
Make sure to check grammar and punctuation. For example, 'acedemic' should be 'academic' and 'healther' should be 'healthier'.
Clarity
Use simpler and clearer sentences. Some of your sentences are long and can be confusing.
Support
Add more examples to support your ideas. Specific examples will make your argument stronger.
Content
You present a clear opinion on the topic and provide points for both sides.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • cooking
  • dressing
  • students
  • exams
  • important
  • development
  • independently
  • balance
  • practical
  • education
  • system
  • confidence
  • challenges
  • performance
  • healthier
  • habits
  • future
  • opportunities
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