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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The given bar chart illustrates the aggregate quantity of
hours
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 spent in three types of activities in Greece
at the end
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 of the 2019s summer by
tourists
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 from China, the USA, Turkey and Brazil.
Overall
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, visiting novel places is the least popular thing
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 which is done by
tourists
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.
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do.
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However
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, Chinese and American visitors tended to read books,
while
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 individuals from Brazil and Turkey preferred to lie on the beach.
According to
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 the chart, people from China spent approximately 8
hours
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 reading books,
whereas
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 Turkish and Brazilian people were twice as interested in studying.
Although
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,
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 Americans read for 5
hours
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,
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while
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 on a visit to tourist locations , only 3
hours
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 were wasted. The same number of
hours
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 was spent by Turks going to cultural sites. The visitors from China were less attracted to visit several areas,
hence
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 only one hour was spent.
Moreover
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, Brazilian
tourists
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 lingered there two times more than
Chinese
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the Chinese
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.
In addition
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, Brazilian people stayed at the beach for 6
hours
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,
while
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 the Chinese
3
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stayed 3
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hours
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 less.
Furthermore
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, Turkish and American
tourists
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 swam for about 5
hours
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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