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As more and more students take classes online, classrooms will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In today's world, technology has changed our way of living, including education.
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 some people argue that traditional classrooms will disappear in the future, others hold the opposite view. In
this
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 essay, both sides of the argument will be addressed before a conclusion is reached. One strong reason to support virtual
classes
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 is that
provides
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 convenient life for teachers and their
students
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.
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 is because they can attend their
classes
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 online from any location at any time, which helps them to feel more comfortable.
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, the accessibility of using different educational platforms with many helpful materials,
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 as Zoom and Teams, makes the teaching process easier and more efficient.
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 the other hand, it can be argued that traditional
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 cannot be replaced
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 the importance of face-to-face engagement.
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 stems from the fact that the presence of a teacher is essential to be aware of the
students
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' situation.
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,
students
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 are more likely to be focused and more disciplined in physical
classes
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 compared to virtual
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, where they have more freedom to attend or cheat.
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, traditional methods are the best way to ensure
students
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' understanding and enhance their academic performance. In conclusion,
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 there are convincing arguments on both sides, I firmly believe that, even though physical
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 cannot be replaced by technological alternatives, most people will choose their convenience over all other factors.

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Provide more specific examples to support your points, especially for virtual classes.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly connects to your main argument and flows logically from one to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify the conclusion by summarizing the key points made in the essay.
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The introduction clearly states the topic and the intention to discuss both sides of the argument.
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The essay addresses both views on the topic, which is a strong point in fulfilling the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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