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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in countryside is decreasing Do you think this is a positive or negative issue?

Rural residents are moving to cities from rural regions to find the best conditions for
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. Despite obvious benefits for seekers,
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 practice can lead to the extinction of the countryside.
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 essay will discuss why the centralisation of a country by rural
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 is not as bad as it is commonly believed. It is believed that the process of devastating small towns stops the
development
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 of a region. Without enough
people
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 of working age, companies have to give up extending or even continuing their business,
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it
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 leads to a fall in the economy.
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, Rubcovsk, a small town in Russia with a large tractor factory, was a developing
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 during Soviet times. But since the political collapse, it has lost a majority of the population
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 an economic impact on the region.
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,
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 are the main source of settlement
development
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.
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, as
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was mentioned,
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 are key to
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.
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, when a capital or other large
city
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 is extended by
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 from the peripheries,
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city
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 gets advantages
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 as an increase in the number of employees and a growth of the market. The good instance is Moscow, showing the biggest population in Russia and at the same time having the best conditions for life
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 various jobs and other opportunities. So, a centralisation of population in the country allows
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 to find the best place. In conclusion,
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 a fall in the number of
people
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 in the countryside can lead to the extinction of towns and villages, a coalition of as many
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 as possible in the same
city
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 opens a great opportunity for
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. In my opinion, everybody should leave their rural location to join the society of a capital and to build a new, beautiful world.

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The introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion.
coherence
The essay presents a balanced view of the issue.

Your opinion

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If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic opportunities
  • career prospects
  • quality of life
  • cultural exchange
  • economic stagnation
  • urban overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • environmental degradation
  • pollution
  • natural habitats
  • migration
  • superior education and healthcare services
  • diverse and vibrant cultural landscape
  • local services
  • urban slums
  • pressure on infrastructure
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