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The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The three maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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 the difference between five and ten years ago, and
other
Fix the agreement mistake
another
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 map
showing
Wrong verb form
shows
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current
Correct article usage
the current
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 situation of a
cafe
Use synonyms
.
Overall
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, dine in is added now and new
tables
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 are placed in the
cafe
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, and
also
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 other significant
development
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developments
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 can be seen compared to
past
Correct article usage
the past
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.
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Cafe
Correct article usage
The cafe
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has now
Correct word order
now has
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 modernised look than before.
To begin
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 with, compared
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to cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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 between five and ten years ago, they added
tables
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 on
the
Correct article usage
apply
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either side of the entrance for the customers, so they can enjoy the view of
street
Correct article usage
the street
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while
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 eating.
Moreover
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, they kept other things
at
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in
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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 places.
Furthermore
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, now comparing
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cafe
Correct article usage
the cafe
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 with
current
Correct article usage
the current
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 period to
before
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apply
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five years ago,
Correct article usage
the currently
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currently
Correct word order
cafe currently
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cafe
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have
Wrong verb form
has a more
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 modern look than a decade
.
Rephrase
ago.
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 The
cafe
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 more
tables
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 in the middle, as they removed old and small
tables
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 and placed new dining
tables
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. On the right side of the
Correct your spelling
entrance
entrence
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entrence,
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tehey
Correct your spelling
they
 put
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 cash counter for consumers. They
also
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 added more
tables
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 on each side of
front
Correct article usage
the front
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on
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apply
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terrace for
beautiful
Correct article usage
a beautiful
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 view for people,
while
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 other things remain unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cafe, tables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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