In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In many parts of the world, people are moving to city
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from rural
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of a country to find better jobs, education and healthcare.
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, the population in the rural
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is going down.
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, the city
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have become overcrowded. In my opinion,
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is a negative development because it creates
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for both
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and rural
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. One of the main reasons is that it has reduced the skilled population in rural
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. So, food production in
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area is decreasing
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by
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, which is impacting the country's economy.
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, more young people are moving
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from rural
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in India. So, the population of rural
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is decreasing, which has reduced farming and food production.
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has had a greater impact on the country’s economy. Another reason is that the
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are becoming more overcrowded
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by
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.
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, many
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have increased
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higher living costs, air pollution and healthcare
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. Schools, colleges and hospitals have become overcrowded
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unusual movements. It has increased mental
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reduced quality of life.
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makes life more stressful and difficult for everyone living in the
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. In conclusion,
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there are some benefits of
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trend, I think the
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result is negative. Because
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there are some serious challenges like health
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, education
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, environmental
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. Countries should try to develop rural
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so people do not feel the need to leave these
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You have identified some important issues related to rural to urban migration.
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Your conclusion summarizes your opinion well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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