The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005

The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show the changes that have taken place in the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005
The maps depict how the seaside resort of Templeton
have
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has
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changed
during
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over
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15 years. It is clearly observed that the residential and industrial
area
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areas
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saw dramatic changes,
also
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green places were almost replaced by infrastructure projects. With regard to
residential
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the residential
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area, a new railway line was set up in the north of the city.
In addition
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, some
houses
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and trees were demolished to make
for
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way for
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three apartment blocks and a supermarket in the northwest of the town. To the east of the river, where four
houses
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stand, there used to be a tree.
Moreover
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, the location of the lake did not change. In the west of the lake, a
hose
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house
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and
threes
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three
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were destroyed and a mansion was built in
place
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their place
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of
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
Also
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, a house which was in the north of the lake was converted into two apartments. In 1990, there were woodlands and some
houses
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which were completely knocked down and a factory was developed in 2005.
Furthermore
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, a new ferry was constructed just beside the railway station
.
Punctuation problem
apply
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. In the north of the parking lot, the green space was cleared
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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two
houses
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were replaced. On the one hand, a small woodland was demolished and a new airport was developed in the northwest of the school.
Finally
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, the school, hospital and parking lot remained unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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