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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentages of the country of
people
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 born in
Australia
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, meanwhile the table shows the data
where
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on where
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 those
people
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 live across the
county
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country
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, either in the cities or the rural areas. The
informations
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information
are including
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includes
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people
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 from
Australia
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, the UK, New Zealand, China and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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.
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, the majority
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people
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of people
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 born in
Australia
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is
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are
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 Australian. Most of the
people
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 in
the
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apply
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Australia
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are preferred
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prefer
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 to live in the big cities. 73% of the population born in
Australia
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is
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are
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 local
people
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.
People
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 from
the
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apply
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other countries have the
second highest
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second-highest
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 birth rate in
Australia
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which
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, which
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accounted
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accounts
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 for 14%. Meanwhile,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 has the lowest birth
(1
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rate (1
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%) as compared to China (2%) and New Zealand (3%). The UK
populations
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population
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that
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apply
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born in
Australia
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 is half from other countries,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 7%.
Majority
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The majority
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 of the population in
Australia
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is lived
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lives
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 in the city centre
with
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, with
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 almost 100% are from China citizens.
People
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 from New Zealand
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have
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 the highest percentage
stay
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staying
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 in the rural areas
which
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, which
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 accounted for 20%. The UK,
Australian
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Australia
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 and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 have almost similar populations that stay in c

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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