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IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates thefts of each thousand vehicles in four
various
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countries: Great
Britain
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, Sweden,
France
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, and Canada, from 1990 to 1999.
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, at a glance, in 1990, vehicle theft was common in Great
Britain
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. More was less theft in
France
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.
Also
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 end of the
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year
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end-of-the-year
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 vehicle theft was common in Great
Britain
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, but
more
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less both
France
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 and Canada in 1999.
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,
France
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 started at about 6 in the first
year
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 following
years
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 it increased continued 7. Subsequent
year
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France’s
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, France’s
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 thefts per vehicle fluctuated and returned to its initial value, which was 7. Canada started at 8 in 1990, but
before 3
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3 years before
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years
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, Canada’s number declined and reached 5. In the following
years
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 gradually increased and reached 6 in 1999.
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, Sweden started with 9 thefts in 1990,
it
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and it
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 dramatically
increased
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increased,
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continued peaking
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 at 14
at the end
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 of the
year
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. Great
Britain
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compared
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, compared
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 to other countries more popular and
fluctuated
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fluctuates
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. It started at 18 in the first
year
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after
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 2
years
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, it reached 20. It showed similar increases and decreases until 1990. In the final
year
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, the figure declined and fell to 17. It lagged behind other countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, france, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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