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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows a comparison between male and female
literacy
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 rates , ie in different
regions
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 of the world , for the
last
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 year. The x-axis represents the different
regions
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 , and the y-axis represents the
literacy
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rate
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 in percentages. From an
overall
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 perspective, Females have a higher
literacy
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rate
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 as compared to men in all
regions
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South
Asia
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 has the largest
percentage
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 of
literacy
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rate
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 in males and females,
while
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 developed countries have the lowest
percentage
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. The three
regions
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 which has higher female
literacy
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 rates are South
Asia
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, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa. More than half of the population of females in South
Asia
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 is literate. In Arab States and sub-Saharan Africa. The
percentage
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 is 52% and 48%.. The other three
regions
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 which has lower
literacy
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 rates are East
Asia
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, the Americas/Caribbean and Developed Countries. The percentages are 20%, 11% and 2% respectively. The male
literacy
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 is
also
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 higher in the same three
regions
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 as compared to other
regions
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. The
percentage
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 of literate men in South
Asia
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, Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa is 34% ,29% and 31%.
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 in
Asia
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, American/Caribbean and Developed Countries, the
literacy
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rate
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 is 8% ,10% and1%..

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, regions, rate, asia, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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