Some people think that media like newspaper should stop publishing the information about the people's private life , Others think that control to stop such publication should be put in place. Discuss both views and state you opinion.

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world , many believe that someone’s personal
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should not be shared through newspapers ,
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others think that it should be managed without completely banning
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my opinion , I have a balanced view about
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arguments as there can be advantages
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disadvantages.
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, Publishing details of someone's personal
life
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in newspapers or whatever media often
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rumors
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within the society .
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depending
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on
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their views and situations
people
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, people
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try to judge and have some impression about
personalities
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the personalities
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of people who
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publish
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their private
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life
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lives
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. The real situation of that person can be
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different picture
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.
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,
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situation is more related to cricketers , actors and singers who have some community of fans. Apart from that ,
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can be some personal
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experiences which are very valuable for someone to encourage and develop their selves.
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,
disabled
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a disabled
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person's
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experience or
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a business
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business man
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who started from Scratch
life
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story can be invaluable for some
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readers
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and can be
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a turning
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point
of
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their lives.These
stories
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can be personal
stories
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but
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, but
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which
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they
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may inspire some
individual
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individuals
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to a better direction.
Acccording
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to
above
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given
points
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points,
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it is obvious that
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some
person
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people's
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background
stories
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should be published
on
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articles to educate and
make
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encourage
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people
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, some personal
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of popular personalities should be hindered .
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Further
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I believe
reader
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readers
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have the choice to choose whether to read or avoid.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and sticks to that idea.
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Use transition words to connect your ideas and paragraphs better.
task achievement
Expand on your examples and explain why they are relevant to your main point.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, showing that you engage with the question.
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The examples you provided, like disabled persons' experiences, nicely support your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • voluntarily
  • publishing information
  • private lives
  • privacy
  • ethical journalism
  • self-regulation
  • ethical guidelines
  • regulatory control
  • government regulations
  • media laws
  • sensationalism
  • invasive
  • personal well-being
  • public shaming
  • harassment
  • public figures
  • professional responsibilities
  • public actions
  • balanced approach
  • voluntary restraint
  • accountability
  • freedom of the press
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