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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts illustrate the proportion of three primary
energy
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 sources — fossil
fuels
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,
hydro
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power
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, and nuclear
energy
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 — used to generate
electricity
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 in
India
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,
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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, and
Vietnam
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 over a five-year period, from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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, hydroelectric
power
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 was the dominant
source
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 of
electricity
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 in
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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, and
Vietnam
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,
while
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 fossil
fuels
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 were the main
source
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 in
India
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. Notably, nuclear
energy
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 was not
utilized
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utilised
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 at all in
Morocco
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 and
Vietnam
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. In
India
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, fossil
fuels
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 accounted for the largest share of
electricity
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 production, making up over 75% of total
energy
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 sources.
Hydro
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power
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 contributed 14%, and nuclear
energy
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 made up the remaining 4%.
In contrast
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,
Sweden
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 relied primarily on nuclear
power
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 (44%) and
hydro
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power
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 (52%), with fossil
fuels
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 playing a minimal role at just 4%. In
Morocco
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,
hydro
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power
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 was the overwhelming
source
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, comprising 95% of
electricity
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 generation. The remaining 5% came from fossil
fuels
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, and nuclear
energy
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 was not used at all.
Similarly
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,
Vietnam
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 relied heavily on
hydro
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energy
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 (44%) and fossil
fuels
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 (56%),
while
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 nuclear
energy
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 was absent. In summary,
while
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 hydroelectric
power
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 was a key
source
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 in most countries,
energy
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 generation patterns varied significantly, with
India
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 depending heavily on fossil
fuels
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, and
Sweden
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 showing a strong reliance on both
hydro
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 and nuclear
power
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, fuels, hydro, power, electricity, india, sweden, morocco, vietnam, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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