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The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of visitors visiting a specific Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total number of tourists
was
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increased over the period of time,
while
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 the
visitor
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number of visitors
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 staying on cruise ships
also
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 increased dramatically
from
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over
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last
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the last
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 six years.
and
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And
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 visitors staying on
island
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the island
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was fall
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fell
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 in 2016.
To begin
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 with, there
are
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were
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 1
million
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visitor
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visitors
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was
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staying in ships in 2010, which
is
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increased
dramaticaly
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dramatically
 till
2015
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2015,
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then
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,
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apply
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 it
was
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remained steady till 2016
and
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, and
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 again
climb
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climbed
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 rapidly and finished with 3.5
million
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 in a
year
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.
Moreover
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,
isitor
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visitors
 who
was
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were
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 staying
in
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on
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island
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the island
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 was around 0.75
million
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 in 2010 was remained
same
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the same
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 till
next
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the next
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year
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,
than
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then
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was goes
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it went
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 up for two years,
than
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then
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 again remained steady for
following
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the following
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 two years and fell
agin
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again
 next
year
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 to nearly 1.25
million
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 and
then
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 finished at 1.5
million
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.
Furthermore
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, the total number of
passenger
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passengers
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,
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apply
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 was
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, with
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with
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on
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avarage
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average
0.25
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, 0.25
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million
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 in 2010,
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that is
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which
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 climbed to 0.5
million
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 in
coming
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the following
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year
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, and
fall
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fell
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 next
year
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 with
same
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the same
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 proportion
at
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as
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 was started.
Then
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was
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it was
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 going up
noticebly
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noticeably
 and finished with
whopping
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a whopping
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 2
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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