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There are two line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the tuatal time of doing housework every weeks in same time.

There are two line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the tuatal time of doing housework every weeks in same time.
The line chart above illustrates the consumption of
electricte
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electricity
 in the households, during the time between 1920 to 2019.
the
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The
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 graph shows three colours
orange
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: orange
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, blue,
green
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and green
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. which
mean
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means
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 the washing machine, Refrigerator,
vacuum
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and vacuum
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 cleaner. In 1920, most of the
household
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households
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uses
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used
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dish washer
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dishwashers
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nearly
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, nearly
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 40
percent
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per cent
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, it is the top at
this
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 time.
while
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 the second one was the Vacuum
mashine
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machine
, and the
last
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 one is the
Refrige
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Refrigerator
. In
1940
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1940,
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 we
notice
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noticed
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 there
increasing
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increase
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 in both
mashines
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machines
,
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;
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also
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also,
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 the top was the refrigerator
,
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.
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on
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On
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 the other hand, the Vacuum the percent
raised
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rose
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, but in
small
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a small
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 amount
only
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, only
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 20 use.
Overall
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, the Highest thing in 2019, the
Refrigerate
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Refrigerator
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,
as well as
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 the
Vaccum
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Vacuum
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both
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, both
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of
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apply
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them
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apply
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have
smillier
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similar
percentage
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percentages
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100
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of 100
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%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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