In some countries people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development

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people spend long
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for some countries spend long
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company
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provied
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provide
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on the manager. They can get
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salary
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why they spend
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also they
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complate
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complete
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then
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others. They can gain more respect from the
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the
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development
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hand, there are many negative
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long
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gives much
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work
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manager gives more and more
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company
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high
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on the financial.
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there are has negative and positive
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development
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i
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can find positive
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salery
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salary
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work
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grow
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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state the reasons people work long hours and your opinion on the topic. Make sure to include a direct answer to the question.
coherence
Try to divide your points into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea with examples to support it.
cohesion
Use linking words like 'however', 'for example', and 'on the other hand' to connect your ideas better.
grammar and spelling
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes like 'becouse' which should be 'because'.
content
You presented both positive and negative sides of the issue. This shows a good understanding of the topic.
structure
Your conclusion summarizes the points you made, which is a good practice.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • economic pressures
  • financial stability
  • competitive job markets
  • corporate cultures
  • stigma
  • demonstrate dedication
  • advent of technology
  • blurred the lines
  • accelerated career progression
  • dedicated employee
  • significant negative implications
  • stress levels
  • mental health
  • physical health
  • social and family time
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
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