Some say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the
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so they can have more
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customers
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been argued that advertising
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is the best method to attract customers,
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others think it is an
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obstacle
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no longer be
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attractive to
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essay, I will go through both views and
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my opinion. On the one hand , there are many
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believe
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who believe
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that any successful
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there is
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a great advertisement behind it . One of the main reasons that these days all
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people
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a really busy schedule and life
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or go to the shop.After
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the companies get an idea that they can
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time by doing a
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campaign
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, these companies
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started their
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in
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way are not only the most successful,but all their clients are satisfied.
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, having said
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we should mention the other arguments
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people
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claim that
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people
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will not be longer gives attention.
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is because it is repeated
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, that all
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of them
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are
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each
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other
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.
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, the small
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still
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is still
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from
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different from
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the bigger ones.
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, the
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will feel bored , unless,
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try
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to make it more complicated and costly
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, so
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the
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do
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can not
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be offered
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to make same as the older or the original. Take
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as an
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example,
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there is a local market where trying to make the same advertisement as the most famous one , they actually win ,
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addition,
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they had more
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than ever before thanks to the most popular brand. In conclusion,having looked at the topic in
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detail,
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it is clear
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first argument was the most realistic, which
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happing
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happening
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now
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people
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: people
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are
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buying
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things they do not need,but the advertising
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makes
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it extremely
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difficult
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persuades
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as to perches it .

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