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The bar chart below shows the average monthly expenditure on three categories — food, entertainment, and clothing — by three different age groups in a European country in 2020.

The bar chart below shows the average monthly expenditure on three categories — food, entertainment, and clothing — by three different age groups in a European country in 2020.
The bar chart provides information about the average monthly expenditure on
food
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, entertainment and clothing among three age groups (18-25, 26-45, 46-65) in a European country in 2020. The units are measured in euros.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 spending on
food
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 had the highest figures,
while
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 spending on clothing had the lowest. In general, there was a noticeable difference among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, people aged 46-65 recorded the highest numbers at around
food
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,
whereas
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 on clothing were significantly lower , almost
about
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around
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 85€. Meanwhile, the figures for people aged 26-45 were 200€ on
food
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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