Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There are lots of discussions about the benefits and drawbacks of the Internet
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some of the negative opinions say that modern technologies cause many
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. I agree with
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statement. Lack of offline communication and strange content for young generations are really critical
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for the popularity , from my point of view.
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, people became less communicative
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the increasing
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spending by everyone in the Internet. Unfortunately, real-life meetings have changed to discussions in social networks.
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, adults are used to spending
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with their friends together,
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like to make phone calls even for small
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born after 2000 prefer to spend
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alone with their phones or in online games. Young generations dislike phone calls and adore communication through messengers.
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, children are amazed by strange and stupid videos on online platforms.
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videos don’t help in developing necessary skills for life , and future adults would have
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with coping with the easiest activities that we do every day , like cooking or taking care of their pets.
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, spending
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with a person who uses electronic devices the whole day is a difficult challenge , especially because the person can’t dedicate all their attention to you. I feel uncomfortable and unnecessary in similar situations. Summing up, I fully agree with the statement about the existence of
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created by the Internet.

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Make sure your ideas flow logically by using clearer linking words.
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Try to make your introduction and conclusion more engaging and clear.
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Your opinion is clear throughout the essay.
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Your essay has a clear structure, making it easy to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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  • Consumer behavior
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  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
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  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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