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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish (garbage). Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

There is no denying the fact that the environmentalists have been warning
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 and worrying about the alarming rate at which mankind is producing garbage. There are many socio-cultural and scientific changes that can be held responsible for
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immediate attention from policymakers.
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 masses can be blamed for producing more and more rubbish every day. First and foremost, in
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 materialistic and consumerist society, people buy
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products impulsively
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 unfortunately majority of products are pre-wrapped in non-biodegradable material.
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, everybody is plagued by convenience factors.
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, they have developed a habit of using and throwing the packaging away.
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, population explosion is another factor of unchecked littering. It is well documented that under
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peer pressure and
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 of
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, common people have developed the habit of unnecessary domestic and industrial wastage. To nip the evil in the bud, lawmakers must work sincerely.
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 must enforce strict laws to bring to book those who throw garbage anywhere in public places.
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 the people through various campaigns to
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,
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, and reduce the items of daily use.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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