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The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates data on the popularity of three various subjects:
medicine
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, humanities, and
science
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, at a regional university from 1960 to 2020.
Overall
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, at a glance, humanities over the year sharply decreased, but
on the contrary
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,
medicine
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 over the period increased.
Science
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 was the only subject that remained relatively stable throughout the years.
Firstly
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, on the one hand, in the first year, humanities started at approximately 45%, until 1971 rose moderately and reached 46%. In the following years, it dramatically fell and reached around 7% in 2020.
Science
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 started at 30% in 1960,
while
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science
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 started at a high percentage. In the following years, it relatively declined to approximately 25%, yet despite
this
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, it increased again and returned to its initial level.
Secondly
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,
on the other hand
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,
although
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medicine
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 started at 20%, by 2000 it rose and reached 33%,
while
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 it dropped to about 29%.
At the end
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 of the year,
science
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 and
medicine
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 finished at the same proportion.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medicine, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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