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The chart below shows the resuits of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.Summarise the information by seiecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the resuits of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.Summarise the information by seiecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart below shows that
peoples'
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people's
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coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits among five Australian
cities
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 - most
people
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 would prefer to go to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks,
follow
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followed
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 by buying
instant
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coffee
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, and the least
people
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 would buy fresh
coffee
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. First of all,
taking
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let's take
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 a look at the most favourable option of purchasing
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a
cafe
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. Among 4 out of 5
cities
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, over 55% of the
people
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did go
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went
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 to a
cafe
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 for a drink in the
last
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 4 weeks. On average, the percentage of
people
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 going to
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cafe
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a cafe
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 is 15% to 20% higher than that of the
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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, showing that
people
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 would prefer to enjoy fresh
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a
cafe
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 over other
place
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places
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. Another point worth
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noting
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 is that among all five
cities
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,
people
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 actually prefer to buy
instant
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coffee
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than
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rather than
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 fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks.
Cities
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 like Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart show that the
portortion
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proportion
 of
people
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 buying
instant
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coffee
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 is at least 15% higher than that of the
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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, showing that
people
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 in these areas
acutally
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actually
 would prefer a fast,
convinence
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convenient
 choice like
instant
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coffee
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.
However
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, when we dive deep into
cities
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 like
Sydeny
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Sydney
 and Melbourne, we
could
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can
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 see that the difference is only between 2% to 7%, showing that
people
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 in these
area
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areas
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 would prefer fresh
coffee
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 rather than
instant
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coffee
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.
This
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 interesting figure represents that
people
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 in
cities
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 like
Sydeny
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Sydney
 and Melbourne
,
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apply
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 might
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place value
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value more
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more value
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 on the quality
like
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, like
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 fresh
coffee
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, but other
cities
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 might value on other factors
like
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, like
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convience
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convenience
. But in general,
people
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 in 5
cities
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 do enjoy spending on
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cafe
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cafes
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 to buy
coffee
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 or
tea
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, cities, people, cafe, instant with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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