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The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart gives data about the percentage of individuals who ate specific potrion of herbals on a single day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart illustrates key information about the
proporitions
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proportions
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individuals
who their
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 nutrition system
consist
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consists
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 of daily fruit and
vegetables
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poritions
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portions
 in the United Kingdom from 2001 to 2008. The units are presented in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that women have demonstrated the highest ratios
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 the whole period.
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,
children
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 healthy diet represented the lowest figures in the aforementioned years.
According to
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 the data shown, females' genre started the interval with a modest 20%, before it gradually
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 till it
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 more than 30% by 2006. Followed that a decrease till it returns 30% exactly
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 the end of the course. In terms of both males and children categories, they
remainds
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remain
 constant during the first three years.
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, males' rate climbs to a significant 28% by 2007, prior
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 slight
reduces
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 to 26% by 2008. Children
alos
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also
 experienced the same by the end of the course as they hit a substantial 25% in 2007, but it did not
last
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to
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 2008.

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