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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

This is a part of a letter your receive from an English pen friend. Don't forget to tell me about the area you live in and what you and your friends do in your free time. Write a letter to your pen friend. Write your letter in about 150 words.

Dear Terry, I hope you are doing well, as I received a letter
last
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 week and came to know that you have shifted to the new apartment
along with
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 your university batchmates. First of all, congratulations
for
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 the new residence.
This
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 is your first owned house
and
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, and
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 I am proud that you kept a
thought
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mind
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 to occupy the empty rooms
by
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with
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 your friends on rent. On
this
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 basis, you have started earning as a side income
being
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while being
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 a student. As you mentioned
that
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, its location is in downtown
of
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Windsor. So, I am very curious to know about the place
like
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, like
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 the surroundings, food stores
as
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, as
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 Windsor is well-known for its
cuisines
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.
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, the city border is shared with the United States of America, so kindly mention that as you can have a view towards
the
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another country.
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, currently your summer break is
going
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currently going
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 on, let me know how you and your flatmates spend leisure
time
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time,
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 as the city is quite new for all of you. If you have explored any places till now, do not forget to mention details
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as
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, as
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 well as if possible
share
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, share
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 photographs. I love the way we are in touch by handwritten communication and I will be waiting for a response
of
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to
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this
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 letter with a
tonnes
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ton
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 of eagerness. Regards, Heta Arora

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coherence and cohesion
Try to keep each paragraph focused on a single idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Ensure that your closing is warm and personal to better match the friendly tone of the letter.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and cheerful tone, making it engaging to read.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of questions to encourage the pen friend to respond.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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