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The chart below shows the milk export figures from three European countries between 2008 and 2012.

The chart below shows the milk export figures from three European countries between 2008 and 2012.
The bar chart gives information about the
export
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 of milk from three countries
that is
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 located in Europe during
four
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a
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years
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four-year
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 period.
Overall
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, the highest amount of
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export
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exports
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experienced
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was experienced
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 in Russia
in
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apply
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every year
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while
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, while
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 Poland showed
contrast
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contrasting
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 results. Starting with Russia, in 2008 the proportion of exported milk was
at
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apply
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probably 24
million
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ton
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tons
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, in 2009 it increased by 5
million
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.
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tons.
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 After that, it saw a dramatic rise
up
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to entirely 40
million
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ton
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tons
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which
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, which
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 was the biggest
export
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 rate among all countries and all
years
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. Followed by
this
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 year, its percentage declined slightly in
final
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the final
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years
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. Regarding Italy, in
first
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the first
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 year its
export
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 rate started at 17
million
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. Compared to
Russia
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Russia,
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 its
export
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 rate of milk stayed approximately
same
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the same
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 at around 20
million
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 in
next
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the next
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 four
years
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. Poland was not
leading
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the leading
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 country
according to
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 exports, after the start of 12
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million
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million,
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 it saw some decreases
and
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, and
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 in the final
years
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 it climbed to its peak with nearly 15
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, years, million with synonyms.
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