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The charts below show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1984, 1993 amd 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1984, 1993 amd 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates key information about the total world
population
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 for India, China,
The
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 United States, and Japan in the years
of
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1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that both China and India recorded
the
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 vast
percentages
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percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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.
In contrast
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, Japan recorded the lowest,
while
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 the USA recorded a modest
ratios
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ratio
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.
According to
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 the data shown, in 1950, China had the highest
population
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 rate with 23% approximately, followed
that
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by
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 a decrease to 20% in 2002, and it
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 to
continues
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 until 15% by 2050. Indian's
population
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 experienced a constant increase starting from 15% in 1950, to 17% by 2002,
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 it will hit 19% by 2050. In terms of the United States, the
population
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's rate began with 7% in 1950, before it
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dropped
 to 5% by 2002, and it
projected
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 to
remined
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remain
 the same in the future.
Japanees'
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populaiton
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population
,
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, did not exceed 5% through the two mentioned years, and it will not climb in the future based on the stated projections.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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