Essay topics: Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?

Some people think the
government
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should give money to creative people. I totally agree, and
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because of various reasons I will mention below. First of all, the
government
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is responsible for the
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lifestyle and to make
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life easy and convenient.
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, the
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should
afford
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provide
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the
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essential
life
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services
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such
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as hospitals, schools and public services.
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Moreover
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, a creative person can open a
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business
to gain money so he will get income.
On the other hand
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,
creative
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person is a talent and achievement In conclusion,
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person
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need
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life to be easy, so
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can have
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a smooth
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day to be talented in
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something
he
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like.
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that is
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why I believe the
government
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should expend money to improve and build facilities and premises.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government grants
  • subsidies
  • cultural heritage
  • artistic freedom
  • economic stimulus
  • cultural diversity
  • public funding
  • tourism attraction
  • financial support
  • creative industries
  • allocate resources
  • essential sectors
  • direct societal benefits
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