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Band 3

Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, there are more academies
offer
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 online courses for their
students
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,
while
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 some people believe that it has
it’s
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advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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. In my opinion, I think there are more negative impacts on
students
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 than the positive.
Firstly
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, online learning can be useful for
students
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 to search
relative
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relevant
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 resources on the Internet,
while
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 it is likely that they might be distracted by other information at the same time.
Due to
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 the lack of having a real tutor monitor them, learners can be lazy or lack
of
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focus during the class.
For example
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,
students
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 might play video games or
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watch
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 films when they study at home, and there
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may
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be not
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if
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whether
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 they have completely obtained the knowledge or not. In
this
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 case, online learning should
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along with
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 the
face to face
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face-to-face
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 class as well.
Secondly
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,
while
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 it is important for undergraduates to increase their professional knowledge,
but
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it is
also
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 essential to develop some practical social skills before entering
the
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society.
Students
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 can create social networks if they go to
the
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apply
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universities
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university
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, and they can not only learn how to learn from their
pre-graduates
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peers
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 but
also
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 explore
about
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their future career. In conclusion, I agree that the improvement of technological learning is beneficial
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students
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for students
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 , but the importance of building relationship and reality skills should
also
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 be
considerate
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Also, ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points more strongly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' more effectively to improve the flow of your essay.
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Make sure your paragraphs are focused on one main idea and that you provide evidence or examples for each point you make.
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You clearly understand the topic and present some useful ideas about online learning.
coherence and cohesion
Your points are relevant and you have a good overall structure to your essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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