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It is more important for schoolchilrend to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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 essential and realistic.It is more important for pupils to learn about local
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history
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay needs a clearer structure. Make sure to have clear paragraphs: introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Improve your grammar and spelling to make your points clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it with examples.
task achievement
You have provided reasons for why local history is important.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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