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Band 1.5

In many countries, many people throw a lot of food from restaurants and shops, why do you think people waste in this way? what can be done to reduce the away of food thrown away?

In many countries, many people throw a lot of
food
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 from restaurants and
shop
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shops
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,
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.
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i
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I
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 think people feel full
so
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, so
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 they do not complete their
food
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, and they don't order the
rest
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 to go.
Firstly
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,
who
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how
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 can we reduce the away of
food
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 thrown away ?
we
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We
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 can do
am
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an
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 app to sell the
rest
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 of
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food
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the food
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, but
in
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at
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reduced
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a reduced
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 price.
For example
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, here in
Soudi
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Saudi
we
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Arabia we
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 have an app
name
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named
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 Barakah
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that sell
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sell
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sells
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 the
rest
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 of
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food
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the food
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in
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at
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reduced
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a reduced
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 price.
Secondly
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, we can take the
rest
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 of
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food
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the food
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 and give for
who
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those who
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needs
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need
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 it .
For example
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 , the homeless people
they
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apply
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need more
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then
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than
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any one
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anyone
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. Conclusion,
their's
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there's
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 a lot of ways to reduce
thrown
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food thrown
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food
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 away
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 give two ideas
while
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their's
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there's
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 a lot
ways
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of ways
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly introduce your ideas at the beginning of each paragraph. It helps the reader follow your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, summarize the main points more clearly. This helps to reinforce your ideas.
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Check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'Soudi' should be 'Saudi' and 'thrown' instead of 'thrown'.
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Try to provide more detailed examples or reasons for your ideas about food waste. This can make your argument stronger.
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You provided two clear ideas to reduce food waste, which shows your understanding of the topic.
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Your use of real-life examples, like the app 'Barakah' and giving food to homeless people, makes your essay relatable.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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